The scoring guide states that the 2 essay lacks analysis, focus, direction, coherence, or completion. It is often characterized by persistent errors in sentence Structure, grammar spelling, or usage.

Overall, this essay is not really developed; it is general, thin, sketchy, and disorganized. It only states, without really developing the ideas, possible problems resulting from overpopulation and the need for increased health care.

The syntactical flaws immediately evident in this essay indicate that English is probably a second language for the author. The first sentence-"The notion of human beings living longer lives, requires to address the effects that it will cause on society and individuals"-is so syntactically twisted that its meaning is not clear. In fact, practically every sentence in this brief essay is either awkward, wordy, or unclear.