The scoring guide states that the 2 essay lacks analysis, focus, direction, coherence, or completion. It is often characterized by persistent errors in sentence structure, grammar, spelling, or usage.

The two most basic problems with this essay are that it does not respond to the writing assignment and it has no clear organization. Instead of trying to defend the two viewpoints, the author merely provides a loose narrative of his early experiences in America and then lists in random order as many cultural differences as he can think of.

The fact that the author cannot yet clearly express his ideas in English is reflected by the simplistic and awkward sentence structure and the numerous syntactical and grammatical errors. The author needs more training and more practice in the use of basic conventions of English writing. But just as importantly, the author needs to understand that he must respond analytically to the assignment and must develop his ideas in an organized rather than a rambling fashion.